Another Red Sonja story - for those who appreciate fine writing...

[pvehk]

... there is no reason to bother!

Could have probably used another re-write or seven, but...

Well, here lies:

"Burn."

[Lomax]

I'm afraid that on my computer that's a virtually-unreadable format.

[Tommy]

:)

Seemed to work just fine for me. Opened it with "Notepad" & it worked... :confused:


Tommy. :cool:

[pvehk]

:)

Seemed to work just fine for me. Opened it with "Notepad" & it worked... :confused:


Tommy. :cool:

Notepad should work. Tried some other formats, nothing really worked... I suppose I could make a pdf out of the "story", and host it somewhere?

[pvehk]

How´s this?

http://rapidshare.com/files/62925862/Burn.pdf

(Hope I pdf´d the right version...)

[Lomax]

Aha - with some experimentation I find the Text Wrap function. Still a horrible format (or font, or whatever the right word is), but at least I can now read it.

Quite a good story; though a bit complicated, I thought - took me a while to work out what the condemned man was supposed to have done. I thought the execution scene was bit over-the-top; castration PLUS blinding PLUS having his tongue ripped out PLUS having the bones of one hand shattered PLUS having the other hand nailed to a tree - all topped off by drowning. Man, are they STRICT in that village.

When I first read the name Valeria (is gets a little wearing to see her called "Beloved" Valeria every single time) I thought the un-named narrator was Conan which confused me for a bit.

Sonja was handled well, and the ending was good.

Thanks for posting this.

[pvehk]

Aha - with some experimentation I find the Text Wrap function. Still a horrible format (or font, or whatever the right word is), but at least I can now read it.

Quite a good story; though a bit complicated, I thought - took me a while to work out what the condemned man was supposed to have done. I thought the execution scene was bit over-the-top; castration PLUS blinding PLUS having his tongue ripped out PLUS having the bones of one hand shattered PLUS having the other hand nailed to a tree - all topped off by drowning. Man, are they STRICT in that village.

When I first read the name Valeria (is gets a little wearing to see her called "Beloved" Valeria every single time) I thought the un-named narrator was Conan which confused me for a bit.

Sonja was handled well, and the ending was good.

Thanks for posting this.

Much valued comments from one of my all-time favourite Sonja-scribes... Thanks!

As for the comments...

Format/Font... Sorry, my bad!

Too complicated, agreed; hopefully, the next one, if ever finishished, won´t be...

The execution was meant to be over-the-top; it was a sacrifice, really, and I would assume the unnamed narrator ("Young Lord") had insisted on quite a few of the details.

I hate names... Valeria & Niord were stolen from Conan, Aenor from an unfinished story (and the rest remained nameless!). And as for that "Beloved" (as well as the constant use of possessive; "My B. Valeria", "My father", etc.), well I hoped this would help the reader "read" the narrator; it perhaps almost might have possibly even worked, if only...

Anyway, thanks for the comments!

[TONI MASDIONO]

final burn was perfect, maybe too perfect for a comics, 'cos sometimes i think for a 20 pages comics, simplify will works more. this just my opinion, what you think? but i like final burn ^_^

[pvehk]

final burn was perfect, maybe too perfect for a comics, 'cos sometimes i think for a 20 pages comics, simplify will works more. this just my opinion, what you think? but i like final burn ^_^

Thanks!!!
I agree, simple works better (in writing anyway); really, the main theme of "Burn." (Sorry, "The final burn" is just a name I picked for the penultimate version of the story, to put an end to an endless cycle of re-writes...) seems to have been my self-indulgence as a "writer".